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小编:Linda 157如果能够使自己的托福写作文章充满特色脱颖而出的话,想不让考官给高分恐怕都难,环球教育(原环球教育)小编这就教你具体这样的好方法:
增色示例一、原句:The unexpected win of the match give us confidence.修改后:The unexpected win of the match boost our confidence.亮点评析:give也属于英语中最初级、最基本的词汇,只表示“给,给予”这个动作,不涉及动作的性质和状态,若表示增添信心,增强士气,比较地道的说法是用boost confidence/morale,如:The change of management has boosted morale throughout the company. 管理模式的改变使整个公司上下士气倍受鼓舞。所以这一点主要是针对一些普通的过度使用的词汇如何用新颖的替代词或者短语来进行增色的。
增色示例二、原句: You should compete to live in this society.修改后:You should compete for survival; otherwise, you will be thrown out of the tide of society.亮点评析:原句平平淡淡,只是告诉人们要在社会立足,必须竞争,但这样一句简单的劝告似乎缺乏说服力,修改后的句子用了compete for survival,为了生存而竞争,而且后面又添加了一个并列分句,补充说明了如果不compete的后果就是be thrown out of the tide of society,被社会的浪潮所淘汰,使用这些更加具体深刻的词汇能够形象生动地表现出竞争的惨烈。这就说明了托福写作中通过补充的观点和例子来增强说服力和内容丰富层次感的重要所在。
增色示例三、原句: We all know that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.修改后:It goes without saying that most factories would be of no use if there were not clean water supply.亮点评析:同上例一样,know这样的初级词汇应避免在作文中使用,It goes without saying that…是一个固定结构,意思是“……是不言而喻的”,常在作文中用来引经据典或表明一个尽人皆知的道理,类似的表达还有:An old saying goes that… Proverb goes that… It is universally acknowledged that… It is generally accepted that…固定结构的使用对于托福写作也很有借鉴意义,类似的结构还有很多大家平时要多留意和积累,找到自己喜欢使用的几个句子形成一套常用的自用格式。
增色示例四、原句:Science and technology have greatly influenced our lives and our society is changing very rapidly.修改后: Science and technology have come to pervade every aspect of our lives and, as a result, society is changing at a speed which is quite unprecedented.亮点评析:greatly,rapidly属于常用词,表示程度高、速度快,这样的词在表达效果上不够具体,缺乏说服力,在修改后的句子中用了pervade every aspect of our lives就具体生动地表现出科技的影响力到底有多大,其影响力已渗透到我们生活的方方面面,at a speed which is quite unprecedented意为“以一种前所未有的速度”,形象地道出了变化速度之快。用更为生动的短语搭配方式代替原来简单的死板词汇也是托福写作的加分方法之一,大家可以从范文等地方多多学习这一点。
这四个结合实例的让作文脱颖而出的方法你都学会了吗?