雅思写作想得高分简洁很重要

2017-11-10编辑: 顾晏羽来自: 环球教育整理

好的写作,首先而且至关重要的一点就是简洁。繁冗的写作堆砌了许多无用的辞藻,反而减弱表述的清晰度。当然,也不能仅仅因为简短就认为短句一定优于长句。只要一个单词确实能够起到一定的作用,它就应该留在句子中。

一般来说,只有在进行强调或修饰,美化句子时,才能使用重复的单词,语音和短语。修改文章,就是要删繁就简。比较下面这对句子,注意体会二者的差别和效果。

(1)Daniel went to Japan by means of a big boat. (2) Daniel went to Japan by boat. 斜体字部分较为啰嗦,"by boat" 就是"by means of boat".  同学们可以再比较以下几句句子:

Wordy: It makes me feel painful to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.

Better: It pains me to think that she has to work 12 hours a day and seven days a week.

Wordy: it will be our aim to ensure proper health care for each and every one of the Chinese people.

Better: our aim is to ensure proper health care for all Chinese.

好,我们来讲一下一些词语简化的一些技巧。

策略之一用介词短语代替从句。例如:1. Wordy: While they were playing tennis, she started and argument that lasted all morning. Better: During tennis she started an argument that lasted all morning. 2. Wordy: When you come to the second traffic light, turn right. Better: At the second traffic light turn right.

策略之二删除诸如"Who is", "that is"之类的关系代词,变从句为短语。例如:Wordy: The novel, which is written in three parts, told a story that took place in the Middle Ages. Better: The three-part novel told a story set in the Middle Ages. 将句子中的"three parts"(名词)改用形容词"three-part"来表达,你可省却四个不必要的单词"which is written in". 像"that"这样的关系代词也常被省掉。

策略之三删除掉你不需要的单词。"Two joint partners will present their views over a long-distance telephone call."写这样的句子后,你自己在读一遍,挑出单词"joint"和"telephone",注意删除不必要的单词。策略之四表达否定意义时,尽量避免使用否定词。英语中有很多不用"no's"或"not's"也能表示否定含义的词汇,你尽可以采取更为委婉的表达方式。举例: Thus college students who do npt have sufficient financial backing.也就是 college students who "lacks sufficient financial backing", 如果你不想用太多的否定词,可以尽量避免使用。

当然简洁并不意味这总写短句子。事实上,如果句子缺少变化,文章就会显得智力皮髓,缺少联系,让人觉得作者的写作技巧贫乏。句式的变化能另文章卸掉流畅,会让读者感受到作者对主题把我的游刃有余。虽然短句没什么语法错误,单用的太多会使本应结合在一起的意思分离开来。所以,不要使用一连串短的,支离破碎的句子。要理清自己的思路,尽量使得自己的句子长度有变化,让句子更加流畅。


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