苏州环球教育杨俊麟老师为大家带来2019年4月27日雅思大小作文的点评及范文解析。

　　A类小作文

　　【作文类型】柱状图

　　【作文题目】1. The bar chart shows the average number of hours of teaching per year done by each teacher in four different countries in 2001.

　　【作文题目】2. The bar chart shows the use of sustainable energy sources in 6 European countries.

　　【综合点评】本次考题主要考察静态图, 载体为柱状图, 考察的时间为过去, 素材中均涉及国家的比较, 一个选取老师每年的平均工作时间, 另一个选取可持续能源的使用量, 在写作过程中需要注意这些内容的同义替换, 以及语法的准确性, 比如hours of teaching / teaching span; consumption of renewable energy/fuel sources; the use of / the quantity of 等的替换. 注意比较大小和差距, 进行概括和总结.

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　　A类大作文

　　【作文题目】1. Some people believe that certain old buildings are more worth preserving than others. Which types of old buildings should be preserved? Do you think the advantages of preserving old buildings outweigh the disadvantages?

　　【题目分析】利弊分析题

　　【题材类别】文化类

　　【思路分析】 本题有两个问题，一是需要回答哪些种类的老建筑需要保护，并且还需要回答保护老建筑的好处和坏处。若只回答保护老建筑的利弊将视为未完成题目要求。本题可以将第一问"哪些老建筑应该被保护"放在第一段再引出自己的观点。

　　Introduction：背景知识+回答第一问+引出自己的观点（topic sentence）：利大于弊

　　Body：1. 保护老建筑的好处 （80%）

　　2.保护老建筑有限的坏处（20%）

　　Conclusion：重申总结自己的观点

　　【作文题目】2.Some people say that it is a waste of time on planning for the future and that it is more important to focus on the present. Do you agree or disagree?

　　【题目分析】同意与否类别

　　本文看似是否同意一个观点：计划未来是浪费时间并且注重当下是更重要的。但题目中并存两个部分：planning for the future和focus on the present，因此在讨论中两者都应该提到，否则视为偏题。

　　Introduction：背景介绍+引入话题+个人观点不同意该观点

　　Body：1.注重当下是重要的，但不承认这是唯一重要的

　　2.计划未来也是重要的

　　Conclusion：重申总结自己的观点

　　【题材类别】 living and thinking 类题目

　　It is sometimes considered controversial whether planning for the future or focusing on the present should be put on the priority. One extreme opinion of this discussion is that attention put on mapping out the future is to squander time and concentrating on the present is of more significance. I disagree with this myopic statement.

　　The idea that focusing on the present is crucial cannot be denied as it is the present contributes to the formation of the future. For example, an inadequate preparation of an exam will definitely lead to a dissatisfactory result; an unfinished daily work will certainly increase the workload in the following days. Moreover, focusing on the present may also be a way to escape from worrying about the future. People tend to receive instant sense of achievement by completing a short-term plan while not wanting to pay too much attention about what might happen in the future. Those who support this view would overemphasize the essence of present as if it is only the today's performance and enjoyment that matter. However, stating the importance of concentrating the present by neglecting the similar necessity of planning future is, in my opinion, superficial.

　　Simply completing tasks given by the present, whether perfectly or not, cannot foster long-standing victory. That a talented speech maker makes every story in an outstanding fashion does not mean the overall logic of the speech will be as perfect as the stories. In other words, it is the entirety that determines the eventual outlook. Also, there are numerous temptations along with peoples' journey, which are likely to mislead them to unwanted consequences. A captain only sails his ship to agreeable waters does not guarantee that he can reach the destination as originally planned. As a whole, a well-planned route for the future would generate a clear path that directly displays what people should target on at different stages.

　　To sum up, insufficient plans on either future or present may bring the final more risks. The present and future are equally important and the both worth to be well-planned for as mapping the future shows an overall path while focusing on present would determine the present and contribute to the future.