2015年10月08日雅思写作考试权威点评

环球教育苏州分校 周敏

A类小作文

【作文类型】map

【作文题目】: The plans below show the South Wing of WaltonMuseum in 2008 and in 2012 after it was redeveloped.

【作文图片】（回忆版本，仅供参考）

笔者综合网友回忆版本，大致还原了考试地图：

【综合点评】非数据图的地图题，一个博物馆的南翼改造图。类似变迁题， 虽然是立体的地图题，但是整体上不难，注意时态把握和描述对象的变化。

【真题解析】图上有明确的时间限定，所以全篇定调过去时。

P1（改写题目，简单介绍图片描述的内容）

The images showthe improvements of the South Wing ofWalton Museum, in 2008 and 2012 respectively.

P2（针对第一幅图进行描写，将建筑的主要情况描述出来）

According to the first plan in 2008 that provides an overview of theoriginal South Wing, there were six separate rooms. Across the path andentering the reception place by the entrance, stairs were provided to go downthe building. Underground owned a special exhibition room and a shop. Next tothe reception area, there was a gallery, which was very close to a two-storedbuilding. People could climb to the reading room, which was thesecond floor, through the stairs between the gallery and the cloakroom.

P3（针对第二幅图与第一幅图的区别进行比较）

Four yearslater, five more rooms were expanded in the plan. The entrance area was enlargedto an entrance hall with a terrace above, which exploited more space, butnothing changed underground. A newly constructed floor serving as a restaurantwas added above the reception and gallery. Moreover, the original receptionarea and the cloakroom were combined. The stairs beside the gallery werereplaced by a lift, which could meet the need of a higher building. Two morefloors were added to the old one, occupied by four rooms. The children centertook the place of the cloakroom while the reading room on the second floorstayed the same. A new self-serving café opened on the third floor along with anew exhibition room on the top floor.

A类大作文

【作文题目】In some countries, secondary schools provide a generaleducation of a range of subjects. In others, children have a narrow range ofsubjects related to a particular career. Which do you think is more appropriatefor modern world?　　

【题目分析】双边讨论类。由于题目要求选择一种，最好在开篇就指出哪一种更合适后进行驳论。注意辩证看待问题。

【题材类别】教育类

【类似真题】

2007.07.07  

Insome countries, secondary schools aim to provide a general education across a   range of subjects. In others, children focuson a narrow range of subjects related to a particular career. For today’sworld, which system is appropriate?

2008.05.22=2004.10.23

Schools should teach childrensome academic subjects which will be beneficial to their future careers.Therefore, other subjects such as music and sports are not important. To whatextent do you agree or disagree with this opinion?

2013.04.27 Some people think thatolder school children should learn wide range subjects and develop knowledge,but other people think that they should only learn a small number of subjectsin details. Discuss both views and give your opinion.

【谋篇布局】

a wide range of subjects VSa narrow range of subjects

学习多科目优势

1.       中学生接受所有科目的教育，开阔视野，发挥才华

2.       提供全面教育，学生掌握更多技能与知识，能开发创新的思维方式

3.       具有竞争优势

学习少科目优势

1.       专注于小部分科目，专门教育，有机会成为专家

2.       培养钻研精神，深度学习

结论：今天的世界知识爆炸，交叉领域层出不穷，多科目教育更有助于开阔学生视野，找到适合自己的定位。

Sample Answer

Para 1:Introduction.（背景引入，摆明立场）

It has always been a controversial issue over whether general educationor specific education is deemed more suitable for schoolchildren. Some people may argue that a narrow range of subjects related toa particular career could prepare students better for future employment, but I firmly believe that secondaryschool provide a general education of a wide range of subjects.

Para 2: BodyParagraph 1（分论点）

Common sense tells us that one is ableto acquire more skills and knowledge if he/she enrolls for a variety ofcourses. Nowadays it is increasingly evident that those who possess knowledgein different fields have a competitive advantage over those who are not. Moreand more companies are looking for diverse talents so students who have a widerbackground of education enable them to be winners in the competitive workplace.

Moreover, students who study a widerange of subjects are more easily to develop innovative thinking skills becauseof engaging in various subjects that spark new thoughts. It is also worthemphasizing that secondary school students are too young to have a clearconcept of career paths. Therefore, it is reasonable for them to select a widerange of subjects to discover their own interests gradually.

Para 3: BodyParagraph 2 (让步段)

The main advantage of focusing on narrowsubjects is that students can concentrate their efforts on a specific area ofinterests and seek to become professionals. This point of view is valuable whenit comes to those subjects that require learner’s commitment for years, such asmedicine, law and engineering. But due to time limits, students only focus onthe depth of knowledge rather than the width, which would compromise their fulldevelopment.

Para 4: Conclusion（总结）

To sum up, in order to survive intoday’s information explosion society, it is more appropriate to encourage secondaryschool students to learn a wide range of subjects

( 298 words)