2015年08月13日雅思写作考试权威点评

环球教育苏州分校 夏明洋

A类小作文

【作文类型】饼图

【作文题目】: The pie charts below show thepercentage of five kinds of books sold by a bookseller between 1972 and 2012.Summarizes the information by selecting and reporting the main features, andmake comparisons where relevant.

【作文图片】（回忆版本，仅供参考）

【综合点评】比较常见的动态图。此图和剑桥8上面的三饼图相似。注意动态图的表达和对比。

【真题解析】比例上涨和比例下降各自一段，进行趋势的对比和描写。

Sample answer：

The pie charts illustrate how the proportion ofdifferent types of books sold by a bookseller changed from 1972 and 2012.

In 1972, Adult fiction, Children ’s fiction andbiographies were in equal percentage (20%). The percentage of Adult fictionclimbed to 25% in 1992, more than doubling in 2012(45%) and becoming the mostpopular book in the year. Children ‘s fiction also saw an upward trend,slightly rising to 22% in 1992 and then to 25% in 2012.

The percentage of biography decreased by 5% in1992, and sharply dipped to 8% after 2 decades. The percentage in travel booksrose from 15% in 1972 to 18 % in 1992, before it again reduced to merely 10% in2012. Other type of books, which accounted for 25% collectively in 1972, alsodropped by 5 % in 1992, ending at 12% in 2012.

Overall, Adults fictions gained greater popularityover the period while other type of books underwent a harsh decline.

A类大作文

【作文题目】 Internationaltravel sometimes makes people prejudiced instead of mind-broad why? How toimprove the understandings of countries they visit?

【题目分析】 报告类，本次写作是旅游类报告文，有一定的难度。难度不在审题，在于思路的拓展。

【题材类别】旅游类

【类似真题】

08.08.21  International travelsometimes makes people more prejudiced rather than broad-minded. Give outreasons why it cannot bring benefits to those visitors. Do you have ways toimprove people’s understanding of the countries they visit?

10.06.26  International travel oftenleads people to have some prejudices rather than broad-minded. What are themain reasons of this phenomenon? What do you think people can do tounderstanding of the countries they visit?

【谋篇布局】

Para1:Introduction. (背景引入，现在越来越多的人抱着开阔眼界的想法到国外旅行。)

Visitors always deem international traveling as agreat opportunity to broaden their knowledge. Yet sometimes visitors caninstead gain their prejudice towards the host country due to certain reasons.Measures should be taken to better the mutual understandings between overseatravelers and the host countries.

Para2: Body paragraph 1 (分论点，总体阐述产生偏见的原因。)

A important factor that provokes the complaints offoreign visitors is that the local residents do not show proper manners. Anegative behavior in China is that people tend to inappropriately call theforeigners as” lao wai”, which would tremendously annoy them. Foreign touristscan also develop negative views over the host place if tourism facilitiescannot bring the foreigners any convenience, such as notifications without anytranslations, toilets without doors. Moreover, foreign travelers can becometremendously disappointed if the host country is not environmentally green andpleasing.

Paragraph 3: body paragraph 2 (分论点，如何解决没有礼貌问题）

Exhibitingfriendliness to the guests from other countries is the first step to establishgood tourism images of the country. Always showing respect to the foreignguests and trying to give a favor hand whenever necessary can leave apositively good impression on them.Impolite languages and gestures shoulddefinitely be avoided and criticized.Residents in host places should also beencouraged to improve their languages skills to avoid misconceptions and culturalconflicts.

Para 4:body paragraph 3（分论点2: 解决设备的方便）

International tourism should construct facilitiesthat well concern the habit of foreign users. All the facilities should aim atmaking visitors from different cultures as easy as being home. Visitors givecredits to the country when they find things were thoughtfully done.

Para4: body paragraph 4 (分论点3: 环境因素)

Foreign visitors judge the traveling country, notonly by the manners of citizens and by the conveniences, but also by theenvironmental conditions. Repulsion would immediately grow among visitors whenthey find the country they visit is severely polluted. Uncivil behaviors, suchas littering, spitting can also leave bad impressions. Improving the awarenessto protect the environment among local residents and establishing a sustainabletourism should be another cynosure of the government.

Para5: Conclusion

To sum up, international tourism providesopportunities to enhance mutual communications between countries. Yet effortsshould be made to ensure that foreign visitors well adapt to the local societyand establish good environmental image to avoid negative judgments.