2016年02月20日雅思考试写作点评

　　环球教育苏州分校朱丁琦

　　小作文

　　饼图+线图，关于不同出生地的工人在澳洲所占比例和失业情况。

　　【题目解析】

　　本次雅思小作文是静态饼图与动态线图的结合图，在处理图形的时候先将二张图分开描写，饼图重点在数据的比较而线图重点则在数据的上升下降变化。本次结合图属于2016年考试第一次出现，难度较低，抓住基本描写点即可。备考的同学重点在动态变化图形，柱状图以及地图上。

　　大作文　　Now more and more advertisements areaimed at children. Some people say the ads will have negative effects onchildren and should be banned. To what extent do you agree or disagree with thestatement.

　　【话题分析】

　　题目是针对儿童的广告会给儿童带来负面影响，应该禁止，是否同意。重点在话题参与对象是儿童，也就是说在论述过程中不是广告的所有负面影响都能讨论，这一点要特别注意。本次话题重复2011年9月15日和2011年6月25日雅思考试题目。属于较旧的话题。从题材上说是媒体类型话题，从体裁上来说是讨论类型，优缺点相关。

　　【话题解析】

　　本次题目重点在是否要禁止针对孩子的广告上，属于很明显就能得出结论，也就是同意该观点。建议将文章写成单边加让步形式。

　　Introduction

　　引入话题，阐述广告的影响，引入话题

　　Body

　　1.让步段，指出针对孩子的广告对人带来一定的好处。(information provider)

　　2.指出针对孩子的广告会带来不理智的消费，而没有正确消费观点的孩子可能会花很多不必要的金钱。

　　3.有些广告会带来一定的行为问题，很多广告内容是由专业人士表演的，但是孩子会模仿。

　　Conclusion

　　重申个人观点，即针对孩子的负面广告应该被禁止。

　　【参考范文】

　　The ad-filmmakers are formulatingfresh ways of enticing the consumers to buy their products. These advertisementsfamiliarize kids with the latest products in the market and inculcate some goodhabits in them, such as, the ones related to dental hygiene. However, thenegative impact on people, especially the young children cannot beneglected.Many individuals find it advisable to abolish this kind ofadvertising for it has harmful effects on children. Personally, I totally agreewith this idea.

　　Indeed, advertising is beneficial topeople into certain extent. Those people, as children’s parents, can know productswhat they want to buy from advertising, such as toys, milk, and something likethat kids use. Parents would buy some things for their children easily. Inaddition, those who invest in ads can receive huge interests from theirproducts.

　　There are a mount of parents buyingthe products related to ads produces because their kids' hope to own it.However, my stance is based on the following that the ads aiming at childrenshould be banned. Firstly, some people who invest in ads intend to earn moneyfrom the unawareness of kids. Using the 'ads words ' which are exaggerated willmislead children to buy the advertised products. Many advertisements in thepresent times include dangerous stunts, which can be performed only by experts.Even though, the commercials broadcast the statutory warnings with theadvertisement, the kids often try to imitate the stunts at home, with fatalresults. The last but not least, uncontrolled buying goods from ads wouldincrease the finance pressure for the parents, especially those who has havenot enough money to buying expensive ads things.

　　To conclude, ads are harmful tochildren’s growing. Although they can make buying stuffs simpler, while theeffects of ads will make more and more kids out of the control from of theirdesire. The advertisements just serve as tools that businessman want to getprofits with.