2015年09月12日雅思写作考试权威点评

环球教育苏州分校 张文倩

A类小作文

【作文类型】线图

【作文题目】: The line graph shows threedifferent crimes in England and Wales in 1970-2005.

【作文图片】（回忆版本，仅供参考）

【综合点评】动态图中的线图，难度不是很大。注意段落的分配、关键数据的描述以及时态问题。

【真题解析】

（改写题目）Theline chart demonstrates three different crimes, namely car theft, houseburgling and street robbery in England and Wales from 1970 to 2005.

(描写cartheft这条线)Compared with house burgling and street robbery, the number of car theft wasthe highest during the period from 1970 to 2005. In 1970, the figure for cartheft was about 0.4 million, which was twice the number of house burgling andten times the number of street robbery. Then the figure climbed steadily,reaching 1 million in 1990, after which the figure peaked at1.6 million in 1995.The following ten years witnessed a sharp decrease of figure, ending at 1million in 2005, which was the same as that in 1990.

(描写houseburgling) In terms of house burgling, the number experienced ups and downs from1970 to 2005. Between 1970 and 1995, the number of house burgling showed anupward trend, from 0.2 million to 0.7 million. After 1995, the number had anopposite trend, decreasing sharply to 0.5million in 2005.

（描写streetrobbery）Duringthis 35 year period, the number of street robbery kept a stable trend. By 1990the number remained steady (0.05), after which it increased gradually, standingat 0.2 million in 2005.

( overview总体趋势) Itcan be seen from the chart that car theft was the main crime in England andWales from 1970 to 2005, while the figure for street robbery was the lowest.

A类大作文

【作文题目】 Students in school oruniversity learn more from classes of teachers than other resources (e.g.Internet or TV). Do you agree or disagree?

【题目分析】 观点类，属于骨灰级老题。观点还是比较好思考的，注意辩证地思考观点。

【题材类别】教育类

【类似真题】

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Studentsat schools and universities learn far more from lessons with teachers than fromother sources ( such as the Internet and television). To what extent do youagree or disagree?

09.04.25

Somepeople think computer and Internet are important in children’s study, butothers think students can learn more effectively in schools and with teachers.Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

【谋篇布局】

Para 1:Introduction.（背景引入，争论点引入话题，摆明立场）

背景With the development of advanced technology, students have awide range of approaches to gain knowledge.改写题目But some people still believe that traditional teaching can helpstudents learn more. 摆明立场In my opinion,although students benefit from Internet and TV, yet teachers play a vital rolein knowledge acquisition.

Para 2: BodyParagraph 1（分论点，解释，举例）

（分论点）老师具有专业的知识，能将知识更有效地传递给学生。First of all, teachers are equipped with professional knowledge.In traditional classes, teachers not only impart knowledge to their studentsbut also make interaction with students. During the communication, teachers canhave a better understanding of them so that teaching materials or teachingmethod will be changed. Apart from acquiring knowledge, students in classes canenjoy teamwork and competition with their peers, which definitely is beneficialto teenager growth.

Para 3: BodyParagraph 2（分论点，解释，举例）

(分论点) 学生自控能力比较差，缺乏规划能力，老师可以帮助他们树立正确价值观人生观。Secondly, teachers can help studentsbuild positive worldview and values. Being confronted with various temptations,teenagers who always cannot tell right from wrong, may easily go astray. Withthe help and guidance of teachers, students can know how to defend themselvesagainst social ills. In addition, a lack of self-control may make studentscannot focus on study. Traditional teaching can cultivate students’concentration and organization.

Para 4: BodyParagraph 3 (让步段)

不可否认，网络和电视等其他资源也是有利于学生发展的。It cannot be denied that other resources such as Internet and TVbenefit the development of students. The fundamental reasons is that thesemodern facilities provide a broader platform for students to access knowledge.Unlike traditional teaching, surfing the Internet help students enlarge theirhorizons and keep step with the temporary pace.

Para 5: Conclusion（总结论点）

综上所述In conclusion,it is true that cutting-edge facilities play an increasingly important role instudents’ study, however the effects of teachers are still in the first place.