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2019年3月14日雅思写作考试权威点评

2019-04-04

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A类小作文

[作文类型] 柱状图

[作文题目]待补充

[作文图片]待补充

[综合点评] 柱状图的练习考生可以参考C9T2; C5Test 2 ; C 4 T 2等官方的范文; 在回答问题时,考虑总结和比较主要特征,并且在相关的地方进行比较,不能直接机械化的描述图表的原始信息和数据. 注意总结分段,全篇条理清晰.


A类大作文

[作文题目]Some people think the best way to reduce crime is to give longer prison
sentences. Others, however, think there are better alternative ways to reduce crime. Discuss both views and give your own opinion.

[题目分析]讨论两边观点并给出个人观点,文章主题思路可以参考C7Test2

[题材类别] 犯罪

[思路分析]话题中的绝对词the best way 说明这个话题的正方观点在过度强调longer prison. 反方观点的 better alternative ways 能降低犯罪, 意味着考生在论证时逻辑关系应该保证: 结果是降低犯罪,无论正方还是反方,都在讨论降低犯罪的方案, 如果文章中给出的方案没有以讨论犯罪率的降低为结果,那么文章为偏题, 此外, 考生需要注意Address all the parts, 即, 题干中the best way 分成两个part 一个是way 一个是best;考生在遇到最高级题目进行头脑风暴时可以问自己这样的问题:  是不是一个方案?是不是最好的方案?

[参考范文]

It has long been a controversial issue how best to maintain the social stability, with one of the priorities being reducing crime rates. Although some argue that longer imprisonment may shed crucial lights, I would argue that this is by no means the best way and alternative measures should be addressed.

Those who overemphasize longer prisoning may argue that this may have a deterring effect on the decline in the crime rates. This is because people who know that they may be subject to sentence of longer prisoning behind the bar may reconsider whether to convict the crime, which may have a deterring effect in the roaring crime rate. Also, longer crime penalty also means felons may spend longer time under control of the authorities, and even they are eligible for parole after serving imprisonment, they may still behave themselves, rather than being put in jail a second time. However, those who consider the longer terms of sentence may live in denial, because when the crime is convicted, the motivation and impulse prevail over the sober thoughtfulness of the outcome of convicting crime.

Other methods should be implemented to put the high crime rate under control.  One of these is raising the self-protection awareness of victims. If people, especially teenager and children, could be told to keep close contact with their relatives, guardian and friends, then they would be well sheltered with kind reminding of potential dangers, which could greatly reduce the violent crimes. Maybe popularizing knowledge about business fraud could also help, as many elderly people are often bailed to invest their pensions in some financial products and become victims of financial fraud. This could be achieved by exercising drill in the local community so that the elder people can be educated and informed on the potential crime scene.

In conclusion, overemphasizing imprisonment may be too narrow an approach and may not achieve the potential effects and combined efforts of kinship and the community may help the teenagers, the minors and the senior citizens out in combating the high crime rate.


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